I was going to grade this more harsely...but
then I saw who the author was and I watched it a bit longer.
I did give you a 5.....but, You need to tighten this up a bit, Cory.
You have good art skills and good scriptwriting skills. That is a very rare combination on Newgrounds (and for somebody your age), and it is clear that you could put out some top notch stuff if you just put a little more time into it.
You need to sit down and put together something great. Take some time on it.
I am going to put you in my favorite artists area so that I can find that "top notch" work when you make it.